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Prince Caspian

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"Cara has managed to...create a character that is both mythical and life-like. Impulsive, moody, and yet kind and good-hearted, Caspian is just beginning to show the makings of a true leader."
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April 11, 2010, 09:07:48 PM
*wanders in an away-from-them-wardly direction*
April 06, 2010, 07:38:36 PM
Irritations indeed... *growls and sits on the ground, holding her head*
April 04, 2010, 08:10:18 PM
Alright, let's avoid fighting among ourselves. Save those irritations for the battlefield.
April 02, 2010, 11:25:42 PM
*grabs at the throbbing ache in her head* You! This hasn't a thing to do with you unless you're about ready to hand over my weapon! *groans cause it REALLY hurt* You... *slouches against a tree*
April 02, 2010, 11:24:35 PM
Angry It was just a little fun, lighten up. (rubs his cheek) You're lucky you're a lady, else I'd have boxed your ears.
April 02, 2010, 11:23:03 PM
D:< (swats Arina upside the head)
April 02, 2010, 11:20:46 PM
I do believe I was well within my rights, making unfounded accusations! And I could have very well hit him with something else if some feathered maiden hadn't snatched away my bow!
April 02, 2010, 11:19:11 PM
>:/ That was completely uncalled for.
April 02, 2010, 11:18:42 PM
:O
April 02, 2010, 11:18:21 PM
*slaps the despicable de la Braose man*
April 02, 2010, 11:15:48 PM
XD
April 02, 2010, 11:12:38 PM
Young WHAT?! *please imagine a rather screechy voice as she thinks of a way to kill person*
April 02, 2010, 11:07:17 PM
Ahh, young love Grin
April 02, 2010, 10:26:40 PM
-grins-
April 02, 2010, 10:08:49 PM
*scowls and says through clenched teeth* I believe I disagree.
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« on: May 22, 2008, 08:09:46 PM »

About You
Name: Emmy
Age: 15
How did you find us: advert browsing
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Character Basics
Name: Cillian Brae Ada
Alias(es)/Nickname(s): Brae, Red
Gender: male
Age: 2 years (adult age)
Race: red fox
Status/Title: Informant
Affiliation: Narnia

Character Appearance
Hair: red with black front legs and black back paws
Eyes: reddish-brown
Distinguishing marks: black legs
Portrayal:

Character Personality
Likes:
~ being useful
~ tricking/confusing Telmarines
~ being active (running around and such)
~ talking
~ tracking things

Dislikes:
~ physical fighting
~ idleness
~ being the center of attention
~ small places
~ water(swimming)

Strengths:
~ very tricky and sly
~ can become "invisible" at will
~ friendly
~ optimistic
~ knows when to go/stop

Weaknesses:
~ small places
~ swimming
~ not very confident sometimes
~ being the center of attention
~ hyper-active

General Personality: Cillian is a very active little fox. He can never sit still and talks almost non-stop. He has a lot of energy that takes a while to wear off. He likes it when people come to him wanting to know what's going on, so he makes a habit of trying to know everything about everything. He doesn't like standing around and it is hard to catch him if he decides to go off somewhere. He is very obedient to those he respects and he tries his best to fulfill each order as well as he can.

Cillian has a sly tongue and mind that usually gets him out of trouble. He prefers a verbal approach to things rather than a physical attack. He is a very good liar and often uses that to his advantage. He enjoys running circles around Telmarines and confusing them. Since he is so small, he is very hard to spot in a large forest. He likes to remain inconspicuous so he can slip away and become 'invisible' if he ever needs to.

This fox likes to keep on the bright side of things. So much so that he sometimes finds himself in denial. He usually ends up convincing himself that nothing bad will ever happen. He knows when it is time to stop and when to say something. Cillian has low confidence sometimes and often finds that he is doubting if he can do something or not, but his friends usually get his confidence up.   

Character History
Parents:
Drystan Ada {Father}
Brites Ada {Mother}
Siblings:
Cyric Ada {Brother}
Cerdwin Ada {Sister}
Caoimhe Ada {Sister}

General History: Cillian was born in a little hole in the ground in the Western Wood. He was one of five kits, but one of his siblings was stillborn, knocking the total down to four. As he was blind, he was kept inside the hole for a little while. At five weeks, Cillian had already gained his eyesight and had begun to explore the immediate area outside the den. Gradually, he wandered further away from the den.

When he was seven weeks old, Cillian happened upon a human town. He had never encountered humans before, so, naturally, Cillian had no fear of them. He wandered into the town, at first getting only strange looks and delighted giggles from small children. Unfortunately, some teenagers decided to 'have some fun' with Cillian. They caught him, but before they could do anything, his parents came to the rescue.

With the youngsters forever scared of foxes, Cillian and his parents returned home. He got a stern talking-to. It turns out, his sister, Caoimhe, had followed him and had run back home to inform their parents of where Cillian had gone. Four weeks later, when it was time for Cillian and his siblings to leave the den, Cillian was sent by his parents, who knew of his hyper and helpful personality, to Aslan's How to join in the war against humans. Cillian was more than happy with this and went without arguement.

Other/Notes: Someone may play his siblings if they would like to!

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RP Sample: Please refer to Senzi.
« Last Edit: June 01, 2008, 01:20:33 PM by Cillian Ada » Logged


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jennifu2006@msn.com jennifu88 faeriequeen06
« Reply #1 on: May 28, 2008, 12:19:29 AM »

Alrighty, this is a very good start! However, I caught several spelling mistakes. You might want to run this through a spelling check to catch them.

You also have a few grammar mistakes that a grammar check and reading your app aloud will probably catch. Make sure you stay consistent in your tenses. In the sentence, "He likes to remain inconspicuous so he can slip away and become 'invisible' if he ever needed to," "needed" should be "needs", as the rest of the sentence is in the present tense. Similarly, in the sentence "At five weeks, Cillian had already gained his eyesight and began to explore the immediate area outside the den," "began" should be "begun", to keep with the past perfect tense you started with. Also, the last word in the history should either be "arguing" or "argument". There were a couple of other grammar mistakes I found as well, so you should keep an eye out for them, but the ones I listed were the ones that popped out most to me.

Finally, your personality and history meet the minimum requirements, but they're still kind of short. You don't have to expand them, but you'd score extra brownie points if you do. Cheesy  Also, I'd add another weakness, as "verbally/mentally stronger animals/humans" is a weakness for everyone.

Oh, and so you know, I linked your two accounts together. So now you can just go to the "Switch Accounts" tab to switch between your two accounts, instead of having to sign in and out every time.
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« Reply #2 on: May 28, 2008, 05:33:35 AM »

Yay for browines! ^_^  I'll be sure to get on those corrections when I can.

Fixed!
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jennifu2006@msn.com jennifu88 faeriequeen06
« Reply #3 on: May 31, 2008, 03:16:03 AM »

Sorry I didn't get to this earlier! I didn't see that you'd finished.

Anyway, I'm sorry, but there are still several spelling mistakes here. Did you run your app through a spell check? That's the quickest way to find and correct them. Also, the last word on your "General History" should be either "arguing" or "argument".

Get those things fixed, and I'll be able to accept your application!
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« Reply #4 on: June 01, 2008, 01:21:06 PM »

Not a problem.

Fixed!
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jennifu2006@msn.com jennifu88 faeriequeen06
« Reply #5 on: June 01, 2008, 09:06:07 PM »

Alright, this looks good to me! This character is now

Accepted!



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